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Hello! Im working on making a webcomic, hopefully releasing the first chapter in March...if I get the motivation to draw 
Ive been planning and drawing the characters for a little over a year, although I think I should give the characters a bit less trauma
The main character (named Raito) is one of the most powerful exorcists in the world, but he's also a single father (his daughter's name is Minako, her personality is based on me since she started out as a Dragon Ball self-insert OC). The story starts with Raito trying to figure out where a missing Exorcist (named Yufina) has gone, but eventually Im gonna pull a 'oh you thought this was a semi-happy story? Nope!' for it
There's also not one, but two doomed Yuri couples in it (one involving Yufina and one involving Raito's childhood friend, Ginga)
Im hopefully going to be drawing at least the cover art tonight 
Ok I got another bit of a story hope you like it;
There is a normal-ish teenage girl her name is Sakura. She's 17 years old in a isekai world. With CRAZY OP skills. Her most used skill is 'Teleport', second 'Shoukan'(summon), third, well, you get the gist of it... Anyway! She lived in a world of magic and the other world is similar in this way but her first world didn't have monsters but this world is on the brink of discruction because of monsters and Sakura is sent into the world to fix it. And there is a LOT of fighting ahead.
Ok, OP Girl P 2 And please say something if you don't like it. I dont think I got a positive answer last time but let's do this.
(The day she dies) "Sakura-sannn!" Says Sakura's only friend, Miku. Sakura says "Ah, Miku-chan. How's the test?" Miku sighs, "I got a D-." Sakura answers "Well, you tried your best, didn't you? Plus in the magic test you got the 5th highest!" "I geuss, But you got first place!" Miku says in a sarcastic tone, kicking a rock into the streem nearby. A truck is speeding, the brakes stop working Miku is crossing, In this world you cant do magic without indecations! "What should I do!" Sakura thinks. She runs and shoves Miku out of the way and gets hit, Blood fling everywhere! And Sakura Dies. But she wakes up leaning on a tree, a big voice says "You're finaly up." Sakura says "What are you and where am I?" The voice answers "You dont seem to remember me? Very well, I am the god of worlds, Caos!" Sakura says "That still doesn't say ANYTHING about where I am." "You are nowhere and yet somewhere." Caos answers, a few minutes later Sakura says "Why dont you show yourself!" Caos comes out of the light, He has Short hair that looks like the the stary night, dark grayish blue eyes with a hint of purple in the corners, and the funny part Sakura had the same eyes. Sakura was confeused. She asks "Why am I here agin?" Caos answers "Ah, yes I did this for some reason let me think...Aha! Yes there is a world a bit like yours, but has monsters and is on the brink of distruction. I want you to save it. What power do you want?" Sakura answers "Any power you say?" He answers "Any power." "Than, I want infenent mana, sommoning, teleportation and whenever I die, I come back to life I come back an hour before I die." Caos answers "Thats all?" "Yep." says Sakura "Than I will acompany you." Says Caos. Sakura says "What?!" Caos says "Welp, we gotta go!"
おめしあがれ!
Once they got into the world Sakura said "Why on earth would you come????!!!!!" Caos answers "You seemed intresting enough, I wanted to see what would happen next." "Ughh, it's like my dad tried to act cool and go to prom with my sister." says Sakura slumping (her sister is dead by the way) he answers "Come on, its not THAT bad!" pointing at the sarving guy with a awful mullet. "Yeah, he needs more help than you do looks wise..." says Sakura looking like this ' ' "Yeah thats BAD." says Caos frowning, "Anyways, the guild is that way.", pointing at the small stall not too faraway from there, and after a few minutes later they reached it. "What, you want food? Sorry but if you're not in the community." Says a grumpy, tired, buff guy. And sakura answers "No, we dont want food or money, we want to register." Caos nods in agreement, with his arms crossed and says "Yep, thats all we wanna do.", than the bulky guy smiles and says "If thats the only thing than fill in these sheets and boom! You're an adveturer!" Once they filled the sheets they were F rank, at the botom of the barrel, and the fun things wont stop now.
I would like someone to draw Caos plz!
Ok I got another bit of a story hope you like it;
There is a normal-ish teenage girl her name is Sakura. She's 17 years old in a isekai world. With CRAZY OP skills. Her most used skill is 'Teleport', second 'Shoukan'(summon), third, well, you get the gist of it... Anyway! She lived in a world of magic and the other world is similar in this way but her first world didn't have monsters but this world is on the brink of discruction because of monsters and Sakura is sent into the world to fix it. And there is a LOT of fighting ahead.
Ok, OP Girl P 2 And please say something if you don't like it. I dont think I got a positive answer last time but let's do this.
(The day she dies) "Sakura-sannn!" Says Sakura's only friend, Miku. Sakura says "Ah, Miku-chan. How's the test?" Miku sighs, "I got a D-." Sakura answers "Well, you tried your best, didn't you? Plus in the magic test you got the 5th highest!" "I geuss, But you got first place!" Miku says in a sarcastic tone, kicking a rock into the streem nearby. A truck is speeding, the brakes stop working Miku is crossing, In this world you cant do magic without indecations! "What should I do!" Sakura thinks. She runs and shoves Miku out of the way and gets hit, Blood fling everywhere! And Sakura Dies. But she wakes up leaning on a tree, a big voice says "You're finaly up." Sakura says "What are you and where am I?" The voice answers "You dont seem to remember me? Very well, I am the god of worlds, Caos!" Sakura says "That still doesn't say ANYTHING about where I am." "You are nowhere and yet somewhere." Caos answers, a few minutes later Sakura says "Why dont you show yourself!" Caos comes out of the light, He has Short hair that looks like the the stary night, dark grayish blue eyes with a hint of purple in the corners, and the funny part Sakura had the same eyes. Sakura was confeused. She asks "Why am I here agin?" Caos answers "Ah, yes I did this for some reason let me think...Aha! Yes there is a world a bit like yours, but has monsters and is on the brink of distruction. I want you to save it. What power do you want?" Sakura answers "Any power you say?" He answers "Any power." "Than, I want infenent mana, sommoning, teleportation and whenever I die, I come back to life I come back an hour before I die." Caos answers "Thats all?" "Yep." says Sakura "Than I will acompany you." Says Caos. Sakura says "What?!" Caos says "Welp, we gotta go!"
おめしあがれ!
Once they got into the world Sakura said "Why on earth would you come????!!!!!" Caos answers "You seemed intresting enough, I wanted to see what would happen next." "Ughh, it's like my dad tried to act cool and go to prom with my sister." says Sakura slumping (her sister is dead by the way) he answers "Come on, its not THAT bad!" pointing at the sarving guy with a awful mullet. "Yeah, he needs more help than you do looks wise..." says Sakura looking like this ' ' "Yeah thats BAD." says Caos frowning, "Anyways, the guild is that way.", pointing at the small stall not too faraway from there, and after a few minutes later they reached it. "What, you want food? Sorry but if you're not in the community." Says a grumpy, tired, buff guy. And sakura answers "No, we dont want food or money, we want to register." Caos nods in agreement, with his arms crossed and says "Yep, thats all we wanna do.", than the bulky guy smiles and says "If thats the only thing than fill in these sheets and boom! You're an adveturer!" Once they filled the sheets they were F rank, at the botom of the barrel, and the fun things wont stop now.
You'd have to go to the "Let's draw each other's OCs" forum, here isn't really the place to ask that 
sorry.
Good for you! Also I've got another story!
The second story for the week is A Romance! I've been doing everything BUT romance for a while now and the reason behind this is well, I don't like too much romance. But today is an aception. Here is the story.; Once opon a time there was a teenage 17 year old princess living a normal loners life. Her name is Ruby Sajaheart, she has long beutiful red hair and sparkly amethyst like eyes (Anyways), but one day she was forced to get engaged to some dukes son who was a compleat and utter slob who treats her like a slave. And she doesn't like that. A few weeks later she needed to get back to school but that same dukes son was acting weird. He wasn't a slob, he was an arrogant, what also serprised her was that he was in the student council ( in which her twin brother was in charge of) he didn't seem the same. Her immediate answer was he was the 'dress to impress' type. Ok I need a break cos I can't spend all day wrighting lol. sorry its not a good start to a romance but tell me if I misspelled anything.
Chapter Two; A perfect personality.
"Rube!!"
says Maya, who is there to help Ruby (whenever Ruby needs it). "Yeah, whats up? I'm working so make it quick." says Ruby pointing at the piles of work on her desk "Thats why I came!" says Maya, rolling her eyes "What are you doing anyways?" asks Maya, Ruby answers "Planing how to get this pain in the backside fiance, obvously!" a few days later the plan was formed! "YES!!! Finaly!"
Ruby says, jumping up and down, squiling. Maya says "Whoo! We did it!" "And with two days remaining!" says Ruby, tired of jumping
-a few days later- "Oh no!" Screems Ruby, running as fast as she could, not looking behind her, her foot slips
and he catches her?
Aperrently she was running from his twin, Lionardo. Ruby sighs in releaf. "phew, wrong person." "Is my brother that rude to you?" Lionardo replies, in a cold but soft tone, still holding her. "Heh, you two look almost identical but your personality is completely different." "Is that supposed to be a complement?" says Lionardo, snickering
, the bell rung, school started, they both went oposit of each other and Lionardo kept on trying to get closer to this very day. Yet agin please tell me if I have anything misspelledOK, so I've NOT been doing ANYTHING interesting so I will try to do this.
He's been folowing her for a while now and she is SICK of him but she has relised that he has been protecting her. You may be thinking "in what way?" well he has been keeping his brother at bay. Anyways, it's been a few days and she needed to get some homework done and obvously Miya is there as well (I originaly thought it would be nice to have these two to be roomates but childhood friends sounded WAY better at the time.) Maya flew open the doors and said "I'm here and at your service!" doing a salute. And Ruby yells out "Goodness graceious! I literaly just called you less than a minute ago!" Miya pants, tired of running thrugh over half the building "Yep," she says still out of breath "I was nearby" she lies and than after a minute of silence Rube answers "You know I saw you running thrughout the building, right?" and Maya says "Homework right?" with her last "pheww..." "Ugh, yes homework and I will let you change the subject this time," "See?" And Maya says "Again???" "Sereously, just let the 'Loner For Life' thing slide!" (I actualy do the 'loner for life thing in real life.) Ruby says "A loner must live up to the loner title!" "UGHHHHHH!!" they both said at the same time and than started laughing. -And the plan stoped there for the month in their time.-
Iris this story of yours just keeps getting more interesting and interesting!! I just want to help you with your spelling
relised: realized ( try sounding it out, re-a-li-zed )
graceious: gracious ( this one is simple, no e!! :D )
thrugh: through ( this one I also simple, add an o!! :D )
thrughout: throughout ( same thing with this, o!! )
serously: seriously ( you just forgot the "i" is all :D )
stoped: stopped ( you were probably just typing too fast, I assume)
hoped this helped you for later writing!! And don't feel embarrassed, I misspell a lot of things too and don't realize it until later revision (same with grammer)
Ok I got another bit of a story hope you like it;
There is a normal-ish teenage girl her name is Sakura. She's 17 years old in a isekai world. With CRAZY OP skills. Her most used skill is 'Teleport', second 'Shoukan'(summon), third, well, you get the gist of it... Anyway! She lived in a world of magic and the other world is similar in this way but her first world didn't have monsters but this world is on the brink of discruction because of monsters and Sakura is sent into the world to fix it. And there is a LOT of fighting ahead.
Ok, OP Girl P 2 And please say something if you don't like it. I dont think I got a positive answer last time but let's do this.
(The day she dies) "Sakura-sannn!" Says Sakura's only friend, Miku. Sakura says "Ah, Miku-chan. How's the test?" Miku sighs, "I got a D-." Sakura answers "Well, you tried your best, didn't you? Plus in the magic test you got the 5th highest!" "I geuss, But you got first place!" Miku says in a sarcastic tone, kicking a rock into the streem nearby. A truck is speeding, the brakes stop working Miku is crossing, In this world you cant do magic without indecations! "What should I do!" Sakura thinks. She runs and shoves Miku out of the way and gets hit, Blood fling everywhere! And Sakura Dies. But she wakes up leaning on a tree, a big voice says "You're finaly up." Sakura says "What are you and where am I?" The voice answers "You dont seem to remember me? Very well, I am the god of worlds, Caos!" Sakura says "That still doesn't say ANYTHING about where I am." "You are nowhere and yet somewhere." Caos answers, a few minutes later Sakura says "Why dont you show yourself!" Caos comes out of the light, He has Short hair that looks like the the stary night, dark grayish blue eyes with a hint of purple in the corners, and the funny part Sakura had the same eyes. Sakura was confeused. She asks "Why am I here agin?" Caos answers "Ah, yes I did this for some reason let me think...Aha! Yes there is a world a bit like yours, but has monsters and is on the brink of distruction. I want you to save it. What power do you want?" Sakura answers "Any power you say?" He answers "Any power." "Than, I want infenent mana, sommoning, teleportation and whenever I die, I come back to life I come back an hour before I die." Caos answers "Thats all?" "Yep." says Sakura "Than I will acompany you." Says Caos. Sakura says "What?!" Caos says "Welp, we gotta go!"
おめしあがれ!
Once they got into the world Sakura said "Why on earth would you come????!!!!!" Caos answers "You seemed intresting enough, I wanted to see what would happen next." "Ughh, it's like my dad tried to act cool and go to prom with my sister." says Sakura slumping (her sister is dead by the way) he answers "Come on, its not THAT bad!" pointing at the sarving guy with a awful mullet. "Yeah, he needs more help than you do looks wise..." says Sakura looking like this ' ' "Yeah thats BAD." says Caos frowning, "Anyways, the guild is that way.", pointing at the small stall not too faraway from there, and after a few minutes later they reached it. "What, you want food? Sorry but if you're not in the community." Says a grumpy, tired, buff guy. And sakura answers "No, we dont want food or money, we want to register." Caos nods in agreement, with his arms crossed and says "Yep, thats all we wanna do.", than the bulky guy smiles and says "If thats the only thing than fill in these sheets and boom! You're an adveturer!" Once they filled the sheets they were F rank, at the botom of the barrel, and the fun things wont stop now.
So it's been a few months and Sakura is already an S rank adveturer now let me um, do the ranks;
1 X
2 SSS
3 SS
4 S
5 AA
6 A
7 B
8 C
9 D
10 E
11 G
12 F
So yeah this is the ramkings the highest is X rank, and there was only one person recorded in this world's history and it's the ledgendary Hero Aaron, the one who defeated the Demon Lord Garflogna (the first female demon lord) and that was around 3,000 years ago so meh. Anyways, yes she is the fastest one to get to S rank and the first to get to that rank without any serious injery the worst that she got wasn't even when she was adveturing it was when she was training when Chaos scrached her.
Iris this story of yours just keeps getting more interesting and interesting!! I just want to help you with your spelling
relised: realized ( try sounding it out, re-a-li-zed )
graceious: gracious ( this one is simple, no e!! :D )
thrugh: through ( this one I also simple, add an o!! :D )
thrughout: throughout ( same thing with this, o!! )
serously: seriously ( you just forgot the "i" is all :D )
stoped: stopped ( you were probably just typing too fast, I assume)
hoped this helped you for later writing!! And don't feel embarrassed, I misspell a lot of things too and don't realize it until later revision (same with grammer)
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